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[topwater17]

Professional Fishing Resume
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Home Phone:   513-xxx-xxxx
Cellular Phone:      513-276-5322
E-Mail                  topwater17@yahoo.com
Occupation:          Waehouse/Coach
Birth date:            October 11, 1969
Birth Place:           Cincinnati, Ohio
Family Status:       Married with two children, ages 9 and 11.
Employer:             United Parcel Service
                   
Fishing Club:   Three Rivers Bass Club, Cincinnati, Ohio
      Founding Member 2001
                          Secretary – 2001 - 2008
                             
Sponsors:              BMBA Sign                                                                           

Associations:
                          Three Rivers Bass Club          
                          Midwest Sportsman Series                           
                          Ohio Bass Federation Nation                                                      Stonelick Bass Anglers

Equipment/Tackle:
      Bass Cat Boat - Johnson Outboard 200hp
                        Reels – Quantum, Phlugger
                            Rods – All Star, BPS series.
                            Line - Stren Magna-Thin
                            Eye wear - Solar Bats sunglasses

Accomplishments:
      2008 Rocky Fork Champion TRBC
      2008 Lake Hardy Champion - TRBC
      2006 Brookville Lake Champion - TRBC
                  2005 Ohio State Qualifier Indian Lake 32nd Place
                            2004 First Place Midwest Sportsman – East Fork Lake
                          2005 Big Bass of the Year Award - TRBC
                          2003 Big Bass of the Year Award - TRBC
                                                                        
Skills/Advantages:
Excellent ability to evaluate and relate with people, and communicate effectively with them.  I have a strong desire to succeed, and an enthusiastic personality. I believe my outgoing nature and strong people skills would enable me to effectively promote myself and my sponsors. I have over ten years of experience in public speaking and public relations with various organizations; most recently the YMCA and St. Al's parish youth sports organizations. I have been involved in every aspect of tournament bass fishing for the past five years from competing to promotions, and the organization and running of single and multi day events. I have a unique insight of the business aspects of bass fishing from the standpoint of a competitor and from an organizer.

[blake711]

I caught a couple spelling errors.

Occupation:  Waehouse  = Warehouse.

Reels – Quantum, Phlugger  = Pflueger

[Mike Cork]

    
I have been involved in every aspect of tournament bass fishing for the past five years from competing to promotions, and the organization and running of single and multi day events. I have a unique insight of the business aspects of bass fishing from the standpoint of a competitor and from an organizer.

Can you expand on your experience in promotions? What exactly is your experience? what did you do to promote and what did you promote and are there any numbers to prove the effectiveness?

Numbers of potential buyers is a great thing to have. If you know your schedule for the next season include this and have the numbers of projected spectator. Sponsors want to know how many views they are going to get.

If you are a salesman, what I slightly gathered from reading your info. Say that and get some numbers and facts to prove it.

You have some great experience to work with here 

[topwater17]

Spell check will be a sure thing when i am finished, thanks!

So it is a good idea to point out direct sales info? I wasn't sure if brand name specifics was a good idea since it was not all fishing related. If it will help I am sure open to changing that and tweeking it.

Thanks for all the help so far.....

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[Mike Cork]

Listing the brand name isn't so much important as if you can claim say a 10% increase in sales 

[Swede]

As Mike stated - a lot of great experience to roll into a resume.

A couple of things I'd change in your Skills/Advantages paragraph:

Excellent ability to evaluate and relate with people, and communicate effectively with them.  I have a strong desire to succeed, and an enthusiastic personality. I believe my outgoing nature and strong people skills would enable me to effectively promote myself and my sponsors. I have over ten years of experience in public speaking and public relations with various organizations; most recently the YMCA and St. Al's parish youth sports organizations. I have been involved in every aspect of tournament bass fishing for the past five years from competing to promotions, and the organization and running of single and multi day events. I have a unique insight of the business aspects of bass fishing from the standpoint of a competitor and from an organizer.

Never start a sentence with "I believe" or "I think" - it says you're not sure about something.

You want to promote your sponsors, as well as, yourself - putting sponsor first says a lot about your priorities.

10 years of public speaking experience and working with our next generation of anglers - good stuff - expand a bit

multi day = multi-day

Keep chipping away - your sculpture is revealing itself