Ryan Resume Review

[Hendersonfishermen16]

Please tell me if my resume has any flaws please be honest. i am fairly new to this. also, fish on i hope you didn't mine me using yours as an example. i cant believe you have so many sponsors. i dont have any. we are about the same age and its nice to have someone to understand my point of view

[fishforfree]

Ryan-

Just finished reading your resume and since you asked.........I'll throw in my opinion.

It reads more like a story and kind of rambles in places.  Where you talk about your 2500 posts on other forums, is right in the mddle of a paragraph pertaining to something else.

My suggestion - Polish up on your writing skills for now and keep on fishin'.


FFF

[Hendersonfishermen16]

thanks for the advice. I have just modified it again.please check it.  I am just starting out with this and would love to have an experienced individual help me out. thanks

P.S. I am currently looking for odd jobs to make money to purchase your fish for free handbook

[Hendersonfishermen16]

nks for the advice fff. I have just modified it again.please check it.  I wrote this at school taking my time to try and make it flow. be honest

thanks, ryan

[fishforfree]

Ryan -  It definitely flows a little better now.

If it was me - I'd remove the whole family history thing.  Not that I don't dig a very tight knit family, it's just that is doesn't necessarily pertain to helping one obtain sponsorship.

It's all about marketing these days.  The numbers you provided are fine, just that if a compnay could get 25,000 new customers by you putting their link in your siggy, you'd be a multi-millionaire and so would a lot of companies.  Great idea........just the numbers are a little unrealistic.

Keep at it - - I like the effort!!!

FFF

[Hendersonfishermen16]

thanks fff. i will fix that.

[Hendersonfishermen16]

ok. i have made a few changes and hope this is better. fff you have been very helpful and maybe you can give me some advice and tips on what to put to seal the deal. thanks again