Resume Review For Jonathan (stumpy05)

docav · January 22, 2007, 11:07:03 AM

Resume for Stumpy05:

http://ultimatebass.com/bass-fishing-forum/index.php/topic,25371.new.html#new

i think you should move this to the chop shop and let us help you out there. doug

JayPea2006 · January 22, 2007, 11:24:39 AM

Quote from: docav on January 22, 2007, 11:07:03 AM
i think you should move this to the chop shop and let us help you out there. doug

I second that motion

Dug · January 22, 2007, 11:36:50 AM

Willing to help out where I can as well. I third the motion of moving it to the chop shop, but I dont' have a link for you, sorry.
Meanwhile Capitalization needs a lot of work. (only capitalize first word of the sentence plus any proper nouns such as the names of places)
Don't highlight the negatives or non-positives such as

I've Lived At The Same House My Whole Life, So Can't Tell You Ive Been Everywhere.
However you can make that a positive statement of stability.

and this just isn't going to work.

As For A Work History, It Looks Awful. Lets Let The Past Stay Behind Us,

Don't even bring it up unless someone asks.

Hope this helps

Dug

CouchTater · January 22, 2007, 11:59:05 AM

Dug,I moved the post to here in the chop shop forum.

Stumpy05,

I have to say I agree with everything that Dug has said so far. Work on your presentation also. When you post your Biography and Background, list some of your activities other than fishing. I'm sure your still in school so list your school and activities with that.

If you need any help feel free to ask.

stumpy05 · January 22, 2007, 12:56:02 PM

actually im outtaschool

i mite be from Tn but we get out before 20 sometimes

in the ive lived in the same place cant tell ya ive moved everywhere, ill think of a way to get that positive

Should i copy my resume here??

Also when i capatalize the first letter in each sentence, when i was in college takin a spanish course which i dont remember now, thats how they taught me to write

it weird i know, but that TN for ya

CouchTater · January 22, 2007, 01:04:12 PM

I didn't know if you were in college or trade school. Sorry...No I will copy a link to your resume...

stumpy05 · January 22, 2007, 01:08:11 PM

alrighty thank ya, no i wished i was in college sometimes, hot girls

thanks for copyin the link for me, was fixin to copy and paste the resme in here

CouchTater · January 22, 2007, 01:09:52 PM

Don't copy it here, this section is for people to talk about your resume and help you make changes to it.

stumpy05 · January 22, 2007, 01:16:44 PM

oooooooooooh well thank ya for tellin me that

and all you people pick it away and tell me what needs to be changed

docav · January 22, 2007, 02:17:13 PM

we can work on this for now: "I've Lived At The Same House My Whole Life, So Can't Tell You Ive Been Everywhere". how about something like: I was born and raised in _____,Tn. I have lived in this area my whole life and have been able to fish the lakes and learn how to fish them very well due to this. drop the work history out and list your tournament history. also dont say guys say anglers or fisherman. fishing experience should be about your tournaments and how you done in them. save the story for a short bio at the end or start with the bio so they get to know you. dont tell how many anglers are in the tournaments with you. if you say you fish with 30-40 other anglers and fish 10 tournaments a year a company is only going to see that 300-400 will see the advertisment a year. low numbers are not good. get a flow going it seems to jump around to me. drop the "put a logo on this and that" say i can help advertise your company by placing your company logos in the following places. something along those lines. theres a place to start and i am sure others can help also. doug

stumpy05 · January 22, 2007, 07:14:36 PM

I have Updated my resume, so yall go take a look at it and tell me what yall think this time

thank ya'll for all the help earlier

docav · January 22, 2007, 07:16:05 PM

it is 100% better than before but will still need some fine tuning to get it up to par. doug

fishforfree · January 23, 2007, 06:41:11 AM

Looks more like an autobigraphy than a resume...

I don't know, it looks like all of the other reseumes I've seen and received. Nothing personal Jonathan, it just doesn't do anything.

stumpy05 · January 23, 2007, 09:20:29 AM

Quote from: docav on January 22, 2007, 07:16:05 PM
it is 100% better than before but will still need some fine tuning to get it up to par. doug

Thank you Doug.

Fish For Free, what do you think i need to change around and make it stand out when i send it in?

imp81318 · January 23, 2007, 09:32:58 AM

"The tournaments that I have fished are just local Wildcat tournaments "

By saying the word just it makes them seem insignificant and unimportant. You are trying to stress that everything you do is what makes you the right person for them to sponsor. From the first version to the second, it seems to me like your general tone is that you haven't really dont much and you don't expect to get the sponsorship. You need to first convince yourself that you deserve sponsorship before you can convince anyone else.

Also, maybe add a part about the success you have had with the company's product and how long you have been using it. Don't lie and make this unique to each resume you send. If you have never used a company's product in a tournament, for example, then why should they feel comfortable that you will be a good spokesman for their product??

I am a big advocate of making an individual resume for every situation/position you send it in for. IMO, if you are not willing to put time into your resume to make it speak to my needs/wants/desires, then why do I feel confident you will put extra time/effort into promoting my product? (in the last sentence, I am theoretically the company's representative reading your resume)

These are just a few thoughts from an unsponsored fisherman. I don't fish tournaments and have never tried for sponsorship, but am giving comments based on impressions of what a good resume should do and how it should come across. Also, keep in mind I am 24 and some of the elder members here may have different views/opinions from me based on their deeper level of experience.

Swede · January 24, 2007, 03:06:14 PM

Good input by imp81318 - I was thinking the same thing when reading. Does the resume's tone convey what you want it to. Do you sound excited about the product you want to promote. Lay the ground work for sponsorship - get to know the product - fish a few tourneys with it - get some pics of fish you have caught with their products or high tourney finishes. Leave out all negativity - words like "won't, can't, doesn't" all convey negativity. Form all sentences around what you will do and what you have done. People like to be around glass half full people not glass half empty people. Your resume should reflect.

Before I requested sponsorship - I had been using the sponsor's products for the better part of 3 years and during those three years I had made many orders (which they had records of) and did very well in a couple of large tourneys. Whatever you can do to raise credibility with the sponsor the better.

Fish for Free (Scott Rauber) - has a great manual to guide you through the process of finding sponsors. I found it to be an invaluable tool and have read through it twice now. Recommend you get a copy - he has Volume 2 out now too which builds upon what was in the first volume. I think businesses in your local area should be targets you consider. Here's the link to Scott's manual

http://www.fishforfree.com/

stumpy05 · February 03, 2007, 12:21:42 PM

ok ive changed some more stuff around on my Resume, learned the name of the tournaments i fished and so forth.

Will yall go take a look at it again and see how it looks now, i think it looks ALOT better now, but yall go look at it and tell me what yall think..

DONT HURT ME TOO BAD PEOPLE